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Emotionally Starved

by Bobo 

Posted: 13 August 2004
Word Count: 74


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This final piece
of me,
my overdue
completion -
that which makes
whole
the disparate parts
flailing
blindly
in the void.

Three decades
of unfinished business,
resolved,
in the sweetest
of instants -
tomorrow morphs
in real-time
vibrancy,
greeting me with
open arms.

Yet.
As my heart
overdoses
on love,
hungered by
famine years
of neglect,
my head overrules
its joy -
reason triumphs
in a realm
where it is
not welcome.

I weep









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roovacrag at 06:49 on 14 August 2004  Report this post
Bobo a sad piece. Heart rendering. Nothing worse than being emotionaly starved of love.

Thats why its important to tell children I love you,so they grow up in a house of love.

Well done.
xx Alice

Nell at 07:38 on 14 August 2004  Report this post
Hi Bobo,

A wonderfully economical piece which yet says so much. It's fascinating how you've shown the reader a character's history and emotional state and also a story without being specific about events - and I guess we can all identify with the emotion at the end: ...reason triumphs/in a realm/where it is/not welcome./I weep. Thoughtfully constructed and clever use of language too.

Nell.



The Walrus at 11:15 on 14 August 2004  Report this post
Very much liked this piece Bobo, twanged a big chord with me - the unwelcome imposition of the mind really pisses me off too and you have captured the heart/mind tug-of-war brilliantly

Great piece.

The Walrus
x

Bobo at 22:49 on 14 August 2004  Report this post
Cheers Walrus. Sometimes the mind really just needs to take a holiday and let the rest of the body just get on with things...too much thinking is definitely a bad thing!

BoBo x

The Walrus at 23:01 on 14 August 2004  Report this post
Damn right lol.

x

olebut at 14:10 on 16 August 2004  Report this post
Bobo

I think I shall give up wiritng poetry you never cease to thrill me with your poetry

wonderful stuff

david


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