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The colour of woman
Posted: 22 August 2004
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I screw the lid tight
and turn over the bottle to read its base.
'Femme'
An agèd burgundy,
blackcurrant stains,
rich claret hues;
smooth, even, symmetrical.
Perfect, perfection.
Tomorrow I shall wash dishes,
clean floors
and one nail will break
and flake off
and split;
then two nails
and even three.
But tonight
I read the colour 'Femme'
and I know that
with these nails
this woman could conquer the world.
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 Fearless at 21:00 on 22 August 2004
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Joan
So she has found her brand...one part resolve to one part of defiance, with a pinch of realisation. It would appear your recent works could be entitled 'Realisations'....
Write on, Fearless
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 joanie at 21:02 on 22 August 2004
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Wonderful, Fearless! I read your response and found myself smiling very broadly, then laughing aloud! You are right!
Thank you. joanie
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deblet at 21:02 on 22 August 2004
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Hi Joannie
Wonderful! Our everyday accesible glamour (nail colour which sounds like wine and wine so effortlessly glam and the more aged the better) - contrasted with everyday work chores. And the damage to that glamour. The contrast is great, as is the sensual strength you realise.
deblet X
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joanie at 21:07 on 22 August 2004
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deblet, thank you so much. Glad you liked it. Thanks for reading and responding.
joanie
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olebut at 12:54 on 23 August 2004
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Joanie what do I know after all I am a man
seriously though great poem,
just wondered should it be titled
'The colour of a woman 'or 'The colour of women'
but then again what do I know
take care
david x
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joanie at 13:02 on 23 August 2004
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Thanks David! This time I think the title has to stand. 'Femme' is 'woman' - I wonder whether it ought to be a capital, though. 'The colour of Woman'. I don't know.
Thank you for your response; it is much appreciated, as always.
joanie
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olebut at 13:18 on 23 August 2004
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Joannie femme alway sound much politer than woman doesn't it . But woman eminates form the old english wifman a derivation of wife.
I take your point about the title just think when spoken it sounds uncomfortable
take care
david x
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roovacrag at 13:45 on 23 August 2004
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Joan.You are femme,beautiful as all women are.
I am woman so no man dare argue on that.
Loved the poem,thought it great.
Second stanza said it all.
Oh to be pampered,nearest I get is molly(dog) licking my feet.
Well done.
xx Alice
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miffle at 15:18 on 23 August 2004
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Love the sound of 'rich claret hues'! Love the irreverence with which you speak of the practical in the second verse... A full bodied poem indeed ;-) Nikki
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joanie at 16:22 on 23 August 2004
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Alice and Nikki, thank you!
David, do you know Helen Reddy's song, 'I am Woman'? I think that is possibly what I'm thinking of.
joanie
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Account Closed at 16:39 on 23 August 2004
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Très jolie, Joanie,
I can picture her dipping those beautiful nails into hot soapy water before scrubbing the floor! (Wearing high-heeled fluffy pink mules, of course!
Elspeth
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joanie at 16:57 on 23 August 2004
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Thanks, Elspeth. She'd need to take off her high-heeled fluffy pink mules before she tried to conquer the world, though.
joanie
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The Walrus at 19:32 on 24 August 2004
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Formidable piece Joanie - combining the spectrum of the daily mundane and the sacred of world of feminine splendour (reminded me of 'Memoirs of a Geisha') and ending with Amazonian spirit.
Loved it.
The Walrus
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Ticonderoga at 15:42 on 25 August 2004
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joanie,
a superb expresion of the fragility of 'glamour' and the ephemeral nature of self-confidence.
Love & Mercy,
mike
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