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The Drowning Fish
Posted: 25 August 2004
Word Count: 47
Summary: like fish out of water......
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The Drowning Fish
His body thrashed against the gravel,
lidless looks searching for wet world.
Rainbow scales fell from his star-jumps, skin
glittered down a rivers flanks. Blushing Trout
sucking hard on earths poisonous atmosphere.
Here drowning fish becomes my alien and I his.
John G.Hall(C)2004
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 miffle at 19:40 on 25 August 2004
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John, Enjoyed this... Man and fish meet, not quite eye to eye... Man would drown in the fish's element and I think he knows this as he watches the dying fish flip. The fish drowns in Man's element (Air).
A neat poem; reminds me of my fishing trip for Mackerel last week. Feel ambiguous about fishing, especially re. the drawn out deaths of the haul. A friend caught a huge (!) Pollock a couple of weeks ago: he is very into fishing, uses something called 'A Priest' to bash the fish over the head with to spare them the suffocation (?) drowning in air (?)
A few queries: 'Wet World' or 'wet world' ? / Does the fish really 'star-jump'? More like an arc? Or jumping towards the stars? / is the absence of apostrophes a stylistic thing?
Kind regards, Nikki
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olebut at 08:25 on 26 August 2004
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John again a metaphor perhaps for us all for aren't we drowning in our own world like the imagery and the phrasiology and 'star jumps' worked for me
take care
david
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roger at 09:07 on 26 August 2004
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Makes you think, doesn't it. Just a fish 'drowning'. I wonder if they think the same of us when we fall off the end of the pier. Nice poem...very unusual. Liked it. A lot.
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 joanie at 14:15 on 26 August 2004
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John, I really enjoyed this. It's strange, isn't it, how what gives life to one murders the other? I liked 'lidless looks'.
Nikki, I remember going fishing with my Dad - I haven't heard 'priest' since then. He had made his own from copper piping and a solid brass screw at the end. I'd forgotten all about that - thanks for the memory!
Good one.
joanie
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Interesting that fish is probably the only food which man still goes out to hunt.
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