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Song to the Sea

by pugwash 

Posted: 29 August 2004
Word Count: 139

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Neptune’s daughter, sea salt spring
Drowning in you as I breathe you in
Arching your back towards the moon
Scooping you up not a moment too soon
Shedding the tears that once you shed
Rocking you on my sea salt bed
Downwards we plunge to sink or swim
Deeper below and further in
The crash of the wave; gasping, shaking
Up for a breath, the surface breaking
Clawing you back as she sucks and swallows
The tide is too strong; she leads, she follows
Under the water but still afire
Souls songs sung by fathomless desire
Weightless now as we drift together
Rain lashed siren; strange heavy weather
Storm blows on throwing up new treasure
Each shell and stone our hearts do measure
The grit in the oyster has borne us a pearl
Beautiful, wet, wild, ancient, young girl

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The Walrus at 20:49 on 29 August 2004  Report this post
Gem of a piece - erotic and elemental. Reminded me strangely of D H Lawrence's 'Bavarian Gentians' - not sure why lol.

Look forward to reading more.

The Walrus

roovacrag at 20:50 on 29 August 2004  Report this post
Pugwash a very good poem and great title. Well written and it flowed well.

Welcome to WW hope you join. nothing like a challenge in writing.

xx Alice

tinyclanger at 09:52 on 30 August 2004  Report this post
Welcome, Pugwash...(great name, maybe we should start a sub-group!)
I really enjoyed this, felt the duality of subject matter was unforced and the rhyming very natural.
Vivid images which were well sustained throughout the piece, and lovely mood changes.
A great start!
Hope you enjoy WW, look forward to reading more.

pugwash at 09:53 on 30 August 2004  Report this post
Thanks for your generous comments and welcome - will seek out Lawrence's poem.

Lawrenco at 16:59 on 02 September 2004  Report this post
Fine poem ,like the other comment loved the mix of erotica and the elements of the sea they go well.

miffle at 18:27 on 02 September 2004  Report this post
Enjoyed this very physical and stirring poem especially the jubilant birth at the end. Feeling very salty now ;-) Kind regards, Nikki

paul53 [for I am he] at 09:20 on 03 March 2005  Report this post
A little gem.

SJ Williamson at 10:04 on 17 April 2009  Report this post
WOW! This is so sensual and beautiful. How talented you are. Looking forward to more.

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