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by laurafraser 

Posted: 21 September 2004
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Now this is what
we are going to do
I am going to hold
Your hand and
We shall take a walk.

Over and past Jupiter and Rome,
over and past the Old Horse at home,
past the green guitar with moss all over
And naturally but of course! the chimerical cliffs of Dover.

Now this is what
We are going to see
to see, to see and not to hear:
Old men kissing pictures of grey&black crinkled photographs
of women they barely knew, and
little children staring up at the sweet counter begging for
just one more yellow Bon Bon, awoorrr goíon just one more yellow Bon Bon
man at the counter with grey balding hair.

But Iím gonna bet you didnít see the fairy ghost
bowing to sink through the gutter bars
under the lame horseís arthritic hooves,
And Iíll make a bet that you didnít see Ďem - those dogs with the caramel pink hair
And Iím going to bet that you didnít see him,
the donkey that smokes marijuana
whilst chatting to Donald the hare.

Now this is what
We are going to do
I am going to hold
Your hand and
We shall take a walk.

Down past a place called Reality
And down to the depths of the lagoon.
Down past a place where Sleeping Beauty still sleeps
where the farting dwarfs sing their bawdy-laudy songs of erotica
to the nymphs who dance on the moon.

Now this is what we are going to do
as we turn and say goodbye to The Plot
and drifts away to become a cloud.

Now I hope now that all this has happened
I can reach out and hold your hand
And now I hope that all this has happened
We can turn and go for our walk.

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The Walrus at 22:06 on 21 September 2004  Report this post
This blew my mind. Another planet - fantastical maybe - but reassuringly real.

Tone and delivery, perfect.

The Walrus

laurafraser at 22:15 on 21 September 2004  Report this post
thank-you! your comment blew my mind!- deeply flattered that you liked it-yey!
thank-you for reading
laura x

Chem at 19:24 on 22 September 2004  Report this post
I really enjoyed this Laura. Your imagination is vast and vivid!
Very good.


Ticonderoga at 17:13 on 24 September 2004  Report this post
Wonderfully 'out there' and original, but also immensely disciplined and focused; you really have a voice of your own. Keep scribbling!!

Love & Mercy,


Don Gorgon at 15:05 on 25 September 2004  Report this post
Laura, it sounds much more fun in your world in the poem, than in the 'real' world! Ganja smoking donkeys, I dig that! Hahahaha! Nice one!


laurafraser at 21:20 on 25 September 2004  Report this post
Em, Mike and Don,
glad that you like my poem-imagination i think can never be too wild, too tame yes but i hope to dive deep to the depths of mine and yet still manage to write poetry that strangers and friends manage to pick semblances (don't think that's a word. but what the heck...!) of coherence from...failing that hope people enjoy
thank-you for reading!
Laura x

laurafraser at 13:27 on 28 September 2004  Report this post
Hey Laura
I thought that was pretty flippin' good.
I like your imagination. I like the style, I like the flow and pace. Fun.

Well done big sister.

Lol Charlie F
(Your Bro)

laurafraser at 17:44 on 28 September 2004  Report this post
ahh! the perils of using your younger brothers computer they can see where you've been...and so you finally see my poetry-cheeky!

Fearless at 18:02 on 29 September 2004  Report this post

Liked this. Anything with midgets and talking animals always gets me moist (with anticipation). Interesting voice - a bit schoolteacherish, with a bit of Slartybartfarst (from 'Hitchiker's Guide...') and of course, Lewis Carroll. Musically, it's like nursery rhyme meeting Funkadelic, meeting Shuggie Otis.

Your use of repitition in your work often sounds reassuring, but on the other hand, often hints at a bigger truth, as if you're waiting for the reader, for 'it' to sink in.

Write on, Fearless

laurafraser at 20:12 on 01 October 2004  Report this post
Woz this is rather a delayed reply to your comment but just read it again and wanted to say interesting that you think a bit of carroll in it-i adore his nonesense poetry, esp. from alice and the looking glass -and so yey! for that link you made!
re the nursery rhymes i think yes the influence is there-they fascinate me as do all children's poetry and novels-from Aesop's fables to kipling to Dahl-i think they all have an inherent power that is lost in "adult" literature, because quite often the author is trying too hard to impress, or to appear mature....
wonder and excitement, learning and freshness are all associated with the child, the innocence of the lamb and with that comes a vulnerability that i find very attractive to play with in my poetry...
thanks for reading

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