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I want my lover to be mine

by JJames 

Posted: 28 September 2004
Word Count: 94


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I want my lover to be mine
Regardless of modern practises
Filling us with moral junk food
Eating temporary sustenance

Itís not enough of a conquest
Realising the frailties of our kind
Listening beyond my walls
Footsteps on your chosen route

It does me good to peer over
Leave the cynic pacing the corridors
Waiting on the birth
Of yet another bastard child

The lens of my ambitions
Holds the focus of hope
Each arguments shoulder
Joins the endless debate

I will risk your wrath
Because no other path exists
To cure deathbed creases











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The Walrus at 14:54 on 28 September 2004  Report this post
This is amazing. Some hugely poignant lines in here - too many to pull out individually.

Powerful and insightful writing - looking forward to more, please.

Red

Chem at 16:38 on 28 September 2004  Report this post
I agree! It's great and I really enjoyed it.
Em

roovacrag at 21:12 on 30 September 2004  Report this post
JJames,welcome to WW. a very good poem,flowed well and rolled off the tongue easily.
Enjoed reading it.

Well done.

xx Alice

Tuppence at 05:08 on 28 December 2004  Report this post
loved it

gard at 20:52 on 15 January 2005  Report this post
Hi JJames

just read thi on the random read. Beautiful and poingnant, like the last verse..


write on!

G

paul53 [for I am he] at 10:00 on 22 March 2005  Report this post
This is a fine piece of work to introduce yourself. Observant - good metaphors. A little too many "ing" words, but that will change as your poetry grows. Hoping you will join full time and enter a group.


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