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Fallen Angel

by laurafraser 

Posted: 30 September 2004
Word Count: 141


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I kissed a fallen angel today,
and then turned her round
to rip those wings
right off her back.

I caught a falling leaf today,
turned it over
and then stuck it
to my book.

Today was also the day I kissed God.
After kissing, he turned
me over and whispered into my ear
and then sent me on my way.

(He turned me over
whispered into my ear
and then sent me on my way).

Falling and turning and kissing
Turning and kissing and turning again

Heavens have opened and Im soaring to them now
Whilst autumn flirts with the trees.

Kissing and falling and twirling and kissing
Would almost complete a fallen angel if she had her wings
Because kissing and falling and twirling some more
Is what were all made for, (though I doubt youll think that true).







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poemsgalore at 18:13 on 30 September 2004  Report this post
This is very lyrical, I can almost hear it being sung to a lone guitar, very melancholy but with a hint of hope. Terrific.

The Walrus at 18:32 on 30 September 2004  Report this post
Really really enjoyed this. Love the blasphemous element, so cool. But what I really love is the spirit of it.

Brilliant piece.

The Walrus

Don Gorgon at 18:39 on 30 September 2004  Report this post
Laura, this poem seemed to 'dance' away as I read it, must be all the 'twirling', 'turning', 'kissing' and 'falling' going on! I really enjoyed reading this, nice one!

Don

Fearless at 19:56 on 30 September 2004  Report this post
Laura,

A divine melding of lyric, movement and everyday fantasy (the best kind, because it's open to all of us).

I really liked the first two stanzas and also

Whilst autumn flirts with the trees

Start submitting to Ambit, because this is the kinda stuff they would be interested in, I think.

Stay fresh, inspired and write on,

Fearless

Ticonderoga at 14:45 on 01 October 2004  Report this post
Wonderful ambiguity and richness of imagery dancing around through these lovely lines. Keep scribbling!

Love & Mercy,

Mike

laurafraser at 20:04 on 01 October 2004  Report this post
poemsgalore, Walrus, Don Fearless amd Ticonderoga,thank-you all for reading and your wonderfully kind comments
xxxx


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