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LOVE ON THE SAND

by roovacrag 

Posted: 06 October 2004
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We walked along the sand
hand in hand,
we kissed on the beach
arms outstretched to reach.

Made love in the sand dunes,
made love in the sea,
not a soul to be seen,
just you and me.

Everything was perfect,
so we thought
then our lives turned around
all was fraught.

Never give up hope
just you and me,
waking up now
all was a dream.






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joanie at 19:37 on 06 October 2004  Report this post
'Never give up hope', Alice! Walking hand in hand on the sand is lovely.

Nice one.

joanie
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roovacrag at 22:04 on 06 October 2004  Report this post
Joan many thanks,
long remembered dream here.

xx Alice
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miffle at 22:14 on 06 October 2004  Report this post
Enjoyed the rhythm of this poem Alice: this sounds like the kind of dream to fall back to sleep for ;-) when the pain of reality hits. Love Nikki x
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roovacrag at 22:28 on 06 October 2004  Report this post
Nikki it is a poem to fall back to sleep on.

Alove that never dies,not even in dreams.

xxxxx cookie

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A love worth waiting for.
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miffle at 22:38 on 06 October 2004  Report this post
I liked it very much Alice: sleep tight then ;-) Nikki x
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The Walrus at 14:02 on 07 October 2004  Report this post
Beautiful piece, tinged with sadness but overriding that the pleasure of the memory.

Red
x
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TheGodfather at 14:39 on 07 October 2004  Report this post
Alice,

fraught...Good word. You create a pleasant little scene here. Dreams are so very real and enjoyable. A free pleasure.

TheGodfather
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Account Closed at 15:50 on 07 October 2004  Report this post
Alice, you make poems that take the reader to a point of beauty, happiness and perfection, then shatter the reader with the final conclusion. I don't know how you do it, but I like it, so don't stop. It's like Ingmar Bergman is writing poetry, fine, fine, stuff you've got going on there.

Paticularly* liked:
"Everything was perfect,
so we thought"



* Can't stand the word particular: I need an alternate :(

Ste
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roovacrag at 21:23 on 07 October 2004  Report this post
Red thanks for comments
xxxxxx STAN
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roovacrag at 21:27 on 07 October 2004  Report this post
GODDY..in dreams we see the ones we love. I still see mine after 11 years. Love never dies.
xxAlice
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roovacrag at 21:41 on 07 October 2004  Report this post
Ste
this poem was from one of my paintings. should be a naked sand,but molly barked and my brush shot up the canvas hence 2 people on the sand.
Rest was from memory love.
Glad you liked it.

xxxAlice
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