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Anticipation

by joanie 

Posted: 06 October 2004
Word Count: 13
Summary: I seem to have done quite a few poems about the apple tree!


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Brewing Autumn winds -
apple pies in the making,
ready on the tree.






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Chem at 20:45 on 06 October 2004  Report this post
joanie

Delightful, delicious and de-lovely! I can smell the pie in the making.

Em

roovacrag at 21:50 on 06 October 2004  Report this post
Joan for you a short poem.

Hope you got more than the one apple I got which the middle grandson ate.

Ok can smell the apple pie and I got the custard.

Well done.
xxxxAlice

miffle at 22:18 on 06 October 2004  Report this post
'Brewing' added a little bit of witchery to this for me: white witchery of course ;-) Apple pie: does anyone not like it? Nikki

joanie at 22:48 on 06 October 2004  Report this post
Em, Alice and Nikki....many thanks! Mmmm....apple pie! I can taste it!

Thank you for your responses.

joanie

Don Gorgon at 23:23 on 06 October 2004  Report this post
My Grandma makes apple pie to die for! Short and sweet joanie. Cool!

Don

joanie at 11:04 on 07 October 2004  Report this post
Don, thank you. I wasn't sure whether the 'short and sweet' was the poem or the apple pie!

joanie

Fearless at 21:25 on 07 October 2004  Report this post
Perhaps anticipation is an apple that sweats?

Write on, Fearless

Mac AM at 16:38 on 08 October 2004  Report this post
I love the apple pies in the making. Could you extend the analogy I wonder by using a different word than brewing which makes me think of cider?

Baking w0ont work because that suggests warm winds, but something similar might work.

Mac

The Walrus at 20:28 on 08 October 2004  Report this post
Not a big fan of apple pies, although I appreciate they are seriously good things. What I did like about this haiku (is it? not big on technical stuff) is the an-ti-ci-pation element. Works every time, in any context. Cool stuff.

The Walrus

Account Closed at 09:50 on 09 October 2004  Report this post
Lovely! The wind brings the scent of them straight off the page - I'm hungry now!!!

:))

LoL

A
xxx

joanie at 11:49 on 09 October 2004  Report this post
Woz, Mac, Christina, HollyB...Many thanks, all of you.

Mac, I tried to think of another word, but I think the 'brewing' made me think of a storm brewing, ready to whip the apples from the tree. I think I'll leave it as it is.

Christina - yes, haiku; 5-7-5.

Seahorse at 14:16 on 13 October 2004  Report this post
Lovely haiku, very vivid as usual.

I must admit I too wasn't entirely convinced about the use of the word "brewing" at first - my immediate reaction was, apple pies don't brew.

But my second reaction was, so what! Your haiku doesn't really suggest they do.

What I'm trying in a long-winded and confusing way to say is, really good, leave it as it is!

joanie at 00:52 on 17 October 2004  Report this post
Seahorse, thank you! Sorry I didn't reply earlier - I hadn't seen your response.
joanie


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