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One, two and three.

by optiplex 

Posted: 07 October 2004
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One shot, two shot and three....
I start to become myself, liberated, free...
Free to laugh, free to smile
Loneliness, numbness and emptiness fall away
One shot, two and three...


Four, five and six - I have had my fix.
Happiness, bliss, and friendliness
All-Bar-One & everyone
Four, five and six - unconsciousness

Quarter to six, alarm bells ring
I start to wake - Soberness returns
Headache, numbness, emptiness
Slow realisation again, of loneliness







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roovacrag at 12:19 on 07 October 2004  Report this post
Opti.......well done for someone who says they are not a poet. Good one for today....... poets day.
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Souchong at 20:18 on 07 October 2004  Report this post
i really like the nursery rhyme element of this, opti.
souchong
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The Walrus at 20:35 on 08 October 2004  Report this post
Wow. No dressing up the message here and I, personally, am very pleased to see that because that is exactly the reason why it speaks and will relate to people. Everybody counts. Funny that.

Cool piece.

Look forward to more.

The Walrus
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Tuppence at 15:39 on 30 January 2005  Report this post
yes like
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Tuppence at 15:41 on 30 January 2005  Report this post
sorry i don't write much in comments
if i like i do if i don't i stay quiet
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Kara at 12:31 on 11 October 2005  Report this post
yep, hits the spot. Cheers...
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Kara at 12:31 on 11 October 2005  Report this post
yep, hits the spot. Cheers...
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