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The Houdini Lover

by laurafraser 

Posted: 04 November 2004
Word Count: 264


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Lets play a nameless game,
A blameless game,
Lets say the prize is the ecstasy of the naked bodies,
Lets say youíll do and move as I do and I move
And yet be so completely unchained.

I want to kiss you&touch you&lick you
I want to devour your essence with my being,
I want to stroke your skin and make you
shiver&quiver like a leaf in an autumnal moment,
I want to touch so very lightly with my fingers still slippery from your saliva
Your soft muscled skin,
That dips and rises like the Sahara desert dunes,
I want to slide those fingers back into the crevices of your mouth
And watch as it closes around them,
Sucking them
Nibbling&biting&vibrating&moaning.

Lets play a nameless game,
A blameless game
The prize is the bliss of the tantric lover with lashings of the eroticism of your fantasy,
Take off your inhibitions,
Leave them on the floor, next to the clothes you havenít worn for so long.

But know, know that even though my skin might erupt
drowning you with its sweat,
Even though my belly explodes
And I tense and I bite
As my legs wrap themselves and entwine themselves
Even though we feel as though weíre no longer separate,
Even though my hands are clenched to fists,
Even though my head is rolling back
And my mouth wide and my teeth are bared,
Even though there is and has been and may even be again all of this,
This evening when you wake and stretch out your arms for me
I shall be gone.






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Fearless at 12:14 on 04 November 2004  Report this post
Powerful, sweat-drenched sensuality, with a passion born of fire, culminating in the conclusion of a feeling that many, including myself, know all too well. It's great and it hurts.

The theme reminds me a little of that nutcase Rimbaud.

Write on, Fearless

joanie at 16:01 on 04 November 2004  Report this post
laura, I enjoyed this - very strong and sensual. I like 'Take off your inhibitions,
Leave them on the floor, next to the clothes you havenít worn for so long.'


I love the short last line - no discussion, no negotiations, a short statement of fact.

Good one.

joanie



sowelu at 19:55 on 04 November 2004  Report this post
Laura this is wonderfully erotic and sensual. "I want to devour your essence with my being" what a devouring line. Excellent. Suzanne.

Ticonderoga at 15:24 on 06 November 2004  Report this post
Wow! Sexy, pungent and hard as nails. D.H.Lawrence would've been proud of this one.

Best,

Mike

laurafraser at 16:35 on 06 November 2004  Report this post
Fearless,
i am glad that you wrote"...born of fire" because that was very much the feeling that i wanted to get across-the fire/passion that scorches all reason...
Joanie and Suzanne,
thank-you for your comments and thank-you for writing "sensual" was terrified that i would find a comment with someone saying "oh please...!" sensuality i think for me has always been something that i may have avoided because i feared sounding too cliche or sterotyped, so i am instantly reassured by your comments-thank-you!
Mike - what a brillant compliment-am humbled and oh so bashfully pleased/touched/surprised! thank-you for erading
xlaura

Don Gorgon at 21:31 on 08 November 2004  Report this post
laura, this is funky stuff! Everyting has already been said above, sexy, erotic and sensual. I really enjoyed reading this! Beautiful works!

Thanks

Don

laurafraser at 14:00 on 09 November 2004  Report this post
Thank-you Don for reading-I like that you enjoyed! xlaura

anisoara at 22:44 on 15 November 2004  Report this post
Laura,

Just came actoss this (not sure how - after a few glasses of wine, anyway) and I am in love! This is MARVELLOUS!

Lemme see it in a mag somewhere now, okay? It needs a wide audience.

Ani

juleschoc at 22:48 on 15 November 2004  Report this post
Great stuff and the last line really hits. Had it published yet?

Jules

laurafraser at 19:38 on 11 April 2005  Report this post
Ani and Jules,

thank-you for your comments, sorry for rather delayed thankyou...
No have not yet had published, tried with Erotic review but they weren't really interested in poetry perhaps at a later date...

Laura




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