Login   Sign Up 



 

Rough

by Jibunnessa 

Posted: 17 June 2003
Word Count: 146
Summary: Just came to me. This is not finished. But, wanted to put it up anyway. Please do comment.


Font Size
 


Printable Version
Print Double spaced


She looked at me. And then looked at him. A sideways glance. A spurious attempt at solidarity with me. As if to say "you and I are the same, but look at him sitting next to me. He's not like us." I ignored her. “What makes you think you’re so special?” I thought to myself. He continued to speak with his rough but animated hands and through a faintly oblivious smile, he drew pictures across the air. But I could still see the translucent shadow across his eyes that dimmed the light, conveying the sadness within. I smiled. I listened. I watched. Those hands. So rough. Scored deeply with the dark cumulative impressions of a lifetime of hard graft. A part of me was angry. How dare she look her nose down at this man. With the rough hands. And the stories pouring through his lips.






Favourite this work Favourite This Author


Comments by other Members



Ioannou at 22:16 on 17 June 2003  Report this post
Fake solidarity, that you don't want. Instant rebellion. All the time. Argh. Keep going, but please let him be too old for her to fall in love with. Too trite. Love, Maria.

noddy at 14:40 on 24 June 2003  Report this post
I like the writing style and am intrigued, wanting it to continue...
Rgds
Nod


To post comments you need to become a member. If you are already a member, please log in .