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BLUE

by LONGJON 

Posted: 03 December 2004
Word Count: 102
Summary: Part of exercise


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Through misplaced snapshot suns,
Sitting in shrouded, dust cloaked dark.
I wonder at the endless, endless blue,

Cold and still, cold and still that once
Flew wild the whirling blade, silent now
I wonder at the endless, endless blue.

That sundered blue I drove, catleaping,
The building through,now mocked by dust,
I wonder at the endless, endless blue.

An impotent rage the godbeams see,
In death watch stillness, bereft of you,
I wonder at the endless, endless blue.

And the end of days a creeping sexton brings,
On a stinking heap, in a fading breeze,
I wonder at the endless, endless blue.






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LONGJON at 23:29 on 03 December 2004  Report this post
Revamped to meet the three line requirement.
John P.

Lawrenco at 23:15 on 09 December 2004  Report this post
I know i`m a bit late posting etc...
I did like this ode to a fan ,I presume Catleap is cat leap (got me going that did.)How appriecative you were of the fan,before its demise or is it just resting ..Nice one John.

Epona Love at 22:07 on 29 December 2004  Report this post
I really enjoyed the imagery and the tone of this, really quite a dark feel... and considering the fan aspect of the exercise you have captured a sense of human mortality with its demise.
full of wonder (wonderful)

Emma x.


gard at 00:35 on 05 January 2005  Report this post
Hi LongJon

I have not read the exercise. I do like your language in your poems and this piece too.

Through misplaced snapshot suns,
Sitting in shrouded, dust cloaked dark.
I wonder at the endless, endless blue,


lovely introduction. The last verse does indeed have a dark tone to it.

Lovely rhythm and flow in each verse.

G






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