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Pale Fire

by didau 

Posted: 20 June 2003
Word Count: 31
Summary: Sometimes I can't sleep, or have eaten too much cheese and this sort of thing is the result.
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Lord,
if it snows
I will show
that the pale fire
lighting the way
is all the evidence needed
to know
that you are either drunk
or not going to show.






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bluesky3d at 09:57 on 20 June 2003  Report this post

I will show?

or..

it will show?
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bluesky3d at 14:55 on 20 June 2003  Report this post
Sorry didn’t mean to sound abrupt it is just that I got tripped up

Cos if ‘I’ was a typo for ‘it’ it changes the meaning to

.. waiting for someone to come home through the snow in a car/taxi from a party of pub or it was a police car to tell you bad news?

If it is ‘I will show’, then I am still thinking about it…

A :o)
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didau at 16:15 on 20 June 2003  Report this post
It is 'I' not 'it'

let me know when you've finished thinking

d
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pene at 12:31 on 30 June 2003  Report this post
very thought provoking, made me feel sad but am alittle unsure why!?
I am also thinking about it
Pene
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Agnieszka Ryk at 09:00 on 01 July 2003  Report this post
I take this as an anti-religious poem - the 'you are not going to show' is referring to the Lord, and the image of the Lord being too drunk to show is quite amusing - I like the strangeness of the 'I will show', it implies you have some kind of divine power, it trips you up, and as you say makes you think about it. Keep eating the cheese I say.
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didau at 10:25 on 04 July 2003  Report this post
The idea of God being drunk was something I came accross in a book about Omar Kiyyam.

glad you've all found it so thought provoking

david
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