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What to do when Happy.

by laurafraser 

Posted: 13 January 2005
Word Count: 187
Summary: "naked bodies and lost friends" form part of the "turbulent dream" eg things from your past-yet waking you feel so calm/well-rested, as if all complete...

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Turbulent dreams belie a sense of calm:
A man strokes a womanís head as she sleeps
Whilst a war of naked bodies and lost friends scream their vitriolic inside.
And then I walk in here. this hot, milky, dimly lit room
Where hypnotists' beckon the somnambultic trance
(some say).
But today I find myself buzzing -
Freudís analysis would say Ďoh its simply sex,Ē
Whilst the tantristsí smile and go on their way,
Breathing and murmuring soft groans of delight.
Floating past old ladies and young debutantes on the road
Babies and over-priced perambulators past a homeless boy looking glum.
We all started the same way, we all end with a thing called death,
But itís the middle part thatís just as thrilling
And yet for some itís so damn chilling.
Here I smile and I laugh, I tease and I play
And yet, of course,
There is another who spits, as he hisses, and swears as he sobs.
To him they say you must go,
To the ones you do not know.
So slowly I turn, so slowly I turn
To face these frowns below tears.

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Beanie Baby at 21:30 on 13 January 2005  Report this post
I think this is fascinating, Laura. There is no one form to it yet it reads so beautifully. I like the way it starts to slowly and ends so slowly yet the middle bit races along in quick phrases
"Floating past old ladies and young debutantes on the road" It is indeed the middle part that is thrilling! I love the pentultimate line "So slowly I turn, so slowly I turn" It is almost a whisper. Quite haunting. Well done, you!

The Walrus at 10:20 on 14 January 2005  Report this post
I feel quite voyeuristic reading this - being privy to someone's subconscious! It's really quite fascinating - a series of bizarre images punctuated by self-analysis and philosophical musings. It feels so real... in terms of dreams... their weirdness and seeming randomness. It also left me with alot of questions about the people in this dream, but I guess again, this is the nature of dreams... there is no control over what the content is going to be.

Good piece Laura, really got me thinking.

The Walrus

Ticonderoga at 17:04 on 15 January 2005  Report this post
Very deep, dark, tangled, tantalising & thought-provoking. Really lingers, this.



gard at 13:47 on 16 January 2005  Report this post
Hi laurafraser

some lovely imagery here very poetic. Its tru maybe the form needs some work but this piece is very rich.


laurafraser at 08:44 on 17 January 2005  Report this post
Beanie baby-thank-you for your fantastically kind comments-all very thrilling to read!

the walrus-as always thank-you for your comments and your perceptive insight into what i write-and i am glad that you enjoyed the piece!

Mike, thank-you for reading and making a comment-posting poems still terrifies me occassionally when i'm unsure about a poem so it is a relief and joy to read comments like yours!

thank-you for the advice-i will take into account what you've said when i look at it again later

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