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A Three Line Ditty

by laurafraser 

Posted: 14 February 2005
Word Count: 13
Summary: was about to explode into a plethora of words, when this three line ditty said no more please...

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Doubt ravages me,
Passions drive me
And then laziness hands me a cake.

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dewey at 16:07 on 14 February 2005  Report this post
loving every part of it, starts dark ends light, the reverse of the day. It certainly lightened up my evening.

joanie at 16:09 on 14 February 2005  Report this post
Laura, I really like the brevity with a wealth of meaning. Excellent.


The Walrus at 19:54 on 15 February 2005  Report this post
As Joanie says, brevity with a wealth of meaning. What I really like about it is how you've concisely spanned the spectrum between being driven to acceptance/resignation. It also works at a further level: victim/pursuer/conciliator. All in all, a tight, superbly-balanced poem.

The Walrus

clarefromscotland at 21:47 on 15 February 2005  Report this post
Wonderfully succinct and it has that lovely bathos at the end. The sound of not taking ourselves too seriously! Great stuff.


Souchong at 21:52 on 15 February 2005  Report this post
love it laura.

laurafraser at 08:43 on 16 February 2005  Report this post
thank-you and I'm glad it did so!

thank-you for your comment-much appreaciated

The walrus,
nice to have you back! and thank-you for your comments

havn't heard that word bathos for ages-thank-you for reminding me of it-beautiful little word isn't it? thanks for your comments



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