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When thoughts turn

by joanie 

Posted: 18 February 2005
Word Count: 38
Summary: Yet another result of gazing at the apple tree outside the window, looking for inspiration!
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Your branches
sharp against the clearness,
ready to snag cotton wool
pulled off across the sky.
Your life hidden.

My life
intense within its confines,
longing to catch misted memories
plucked from another season.
My roots laid bare.






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Mac AM at 17:42 on 18 February 2005  Report this post
Hello Joanie,

I love sharp against thr clearness and [plucked from another season

Some good comparisons between the stanzas.

Mac
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joanie at 18:17 on 18 February 2005  Report this post
Thanks for reading, Mac.

joanie
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poemsgalore at 18:40 on 18 February 2005  Report this post
I like the "white cotton wool pulled across the sky" lovely visual representation.
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joanie at 18:48 on 18 February 2005  Report this post
Thank you for your response, Poems.

joanie
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roovacrag at 21:35 on 18 February 2005  Report this post
Joan,wrote one lastyear laid under the fruit trees in my garden.
Wonderous sight,too cold to see the blossom,delight to fettle the fruit.
xx Alice
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joanie at 08:24 on 19 February 2005  Report this post
Thanks Alice!

Joan
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Ticonderoga at 12:59 on 19 February 2005  Report this post
Like a tiny etching in its precision and delicacy. Like this a lot.


Best,

Mike
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joanie at 13:02 on 19 February 2005  Report this post
Mike, thank you for your beautifully expressed response; glad you liked it.

joanie
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engldolph at 08:49 on 23 February 2005  Report this post
Hi Joanie,

Makes me think how interesting it is what nature can do to bring mirroring thoughts up from our minds ..

liked very much the lines:

ready to snag cotton wool
pulled off across the sky.

which mirrors the process of us grabbing our own wooly thoughts..

enjoyed
Mike
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joanie at 16:07 on 23 February 2005  Report this post
Thanks for the response, Mike. Glad you 'got' my intention!

joanie
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paul53 [for I am he] at 19:40 on 24 February 2005  Report this post
A small piece of perfection.
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joanie at 20:35 on 24 February 2005  Report this post
Thank you Paul - I appreciate it.

joanie
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jewelsx at 22:00 on 05 March 2005  Report this post

I particularly like the strong images in the second stanza.

all the best

jewelsx
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joanie at 22:05 on 05 March 2005  Report this post
Thanks, jewelsx!

joanie
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