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Dark Knight

by Ambitions of Lisa 

Posted: 13 March 2005
Word Count: 66
Summary: This was inspired by a friend of mine, however I'm not too sure about the overall style of the poem, but welcome all comments.
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Dark is my knight,

He stirred up my passion,
He aroused my soul,
He awakened my senses,
My innermost dreams

Dark is my knight,

He rocked my emotions,
He re-lit my fire,
He entered my heart,
So deep it seems

Dark is my knight,

He seduced my mind,
He teased my desires,
He ignited my lust,
By beautiful means

Dark is my knight,
My inspiring light






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joanie at 09:35 on 14 March 2005  Report this post
Hi Lisa.

I like the contrast of dark/light and the play on words of 'dark knight'.
I think the repetition works well, both the single line and the start of the first lines of each stanza.

I enjoyed it.

joanie
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Ticonderoga at 16:38 on 14 March 2005  Report this post
Works for me! Tightly shaped, simply expressed.


Best,

Mike
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paul53 [for I am he] at 09:25 on 15 March 2005  Report this post
A fine piece - concise and to the point.
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Ambitions of Lisa at 18:59 on 15 March 2005  Report this post
Many thanks Joanie, Mike and Paul

When it comes from the heart it always seems to work best.

:)
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Zettel at 15:04 on 17 March 2005  Report this post
Hi Lisa

Liked it. More please.

regards


Zettel
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hailfabio at 13:55 on 04 April 2005  Report this post
You can take it eh? lol.

I like this a lot, and can relate to it. It stirs up emotions.

Keep it up babes.

Stephen
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Ling Ling at 07:36 on 11 April 2005  Report this post
I really liked this, honest emotion and consuming passion brilliantly conveyed. Look forward to reading more!
Regards

Ling Ling
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