A Disillusioned Angel. by John G.Hall

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A Disillusioned Angel.

Posted: 18 March 2005
Word Count: 50
Summary: Game was to use the words pink,sole,tequila & leather in the poem. Have a go!
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A Disillusioned Angel

I walked out of heaven
disappointed to hell,

I shook paradisal dust
loose from my sole,

poured myself a large
double tequila sunrise,

put on my pink leather looks
and hit the bars down town,

for heaven is always best
viewed from the bottom up.

John G.Hall@2005

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Posted by : Nell at 12:00 on 18 March 2005

John, I love this - not only a whole vivid scenario but a philosophy in only fifty words! I'd love to have a go but not sure I could after reading yours.

Nell.

Posted by : joanie at 13:06 on 18 March 2005

Hi John. This is excellent in its conciseness and seeming simplicity. It made me smile at the end!

joanie

Posted by : Elsie at 13:11 on 18 March 2005

Georgeous, witty, and I particularly enjoyed the line about shaking dust from your sole, in that context. Love the end lines, too.

Posted by : Tina at 13:39 on 21 March 2005

Great stuff John
I shall allow myself to be horizontal more often!!

Enjoyed it very much
Tina

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