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But You Fly

by John G.Hall 

Posted: 20 March 2005
Word Count: 57
Summary: more of the pink,leather,tequila & sole game
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But You Fly

I blew you a kiss
and your pink dust
clung to my lips,

soft human touch
pushed your leather
wings to self-destruct,

but your tequila tongue
uncurled down my throat
and licked upside my sole,

and now my mind
arches up on tip toe
a drunken poet trying
to open up and fly.



JGH(C)2005






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joanie at 20:51 on 20 March 2005  Report this post
hi John. I enjoyed this too. These things are addictive! I shall have to try this one.

I like the opening lines and the 'but' which changes the focus in the third stanza, then the final stanza's 'and now'.

Seemingly simple but hauntingly elusive.

joanie
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Hamburger Yogi & PBW at 05:40 on 21 March 2005  Report this post
Tactile. A sort of 'liftt-off' mood in this poem. I liked its succinct quality and the innocence.

But I coulnd't find an association for 'leather wings'.
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Tina at 13:47 on 21 March 2005  Report this post
John I htink I shall buy a bottel of tequila for Easter - seems to have a potent effect - enjoyed reading this too - agree with Joanie I think this set is addictive - more please.
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