Hi, Jabulani. This is lovely in its seeming simplicity and conciseness. I love
'all we touch
slips away'

Beautiful.
joanie

Thanks Joanie.
It was written late last night on a train......an idea that came to me.
I am trying to use my own natural voice and avoid being overly clever in my writing.
This is very hard to do without coming across as too obvious and predictable........I am really interested to know how others receive this.

If that is your natural voice, then go with it. This is a fine poem that evokes a lot within the reader [well, it does me]. There must be something about the rhythm of a train that gets the poetry flowing.

Beautiful almost ethereal piece which, I feel, 'speaks' naturally.

I enjoyed it very much.

The Walrus

Thanks so much....The Walrus
I've been looking at your profile. Wow! What a lot of work...
Thank you for your encouragement.

Jabulani

This piece slips away from me, but this I like. Kind regards, Nikki