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Judas Lives
Posted: 13 May 2005
Word Count: 39
Summary: Judas betrays history & escapes guilt or did he just miss the point, again?
Related Works: A Disillusioned Angel. •
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Judas Lives
Informer on myself
I counted my thirty
Caesar's heads,
sipped my wine
under sinless trees
and let history hang,
moved to Babylon
and opened a brothel
called the son of man,
he'd have liked that.
John G.Hall(C)2005
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 Okkervil at 16:47 on 14 May 2005
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Starkly without remorse, as I guess is the point. This made me smile, but when I just made some coffee I spilt some boiling water on my thumb, so it's okay. The combination of cheap religious jokes down to the nod-to-the-camera last line with the profundity of some of the ideas here is quite appealing! 'Ceaser's heads' isn't quite as nice a phrase to say as could be. I know you're trying to avoid 'silver pieces' or what-not, but it's too hissy to savour saying. I can't, im Moment, of anything else to say in its place though, so sorry for that.
Bye!
James
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laurafraser at 12:44 on 15 May 2005
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i actually think that "caesar's heads" works quite nicely, becaue i think the image is so potentially vast, ie e/thing that caesar stood for comes crashing down on this small very modest poem (modest intended in a good way) and i like the contrast with the "sippiing wine"
this piece works well, could go further...but of course thta is entirely up to you!
LAura
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 John G.Hall at 14:48 on 16 May 2005
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Thanks folks.
I wanted Judas to sound hissy, the proverbial snake.
He has kept the trees from committing the sin of hanging him.
History can hang itself, he's not hanging around feeling guilty.
After enjoying wine savoured from the last supper.
He's off to Babylon to help himself to some loving & help others to help themselves to some. Surely what Jesus preached, he thinks.
I'm doing a tour of the Apostles, see the Mathew poem.
Cheers.
JGH
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