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A vehicle for my desires

by bluesky3d 

Posted: 15 July 2003
Word Count: 100
Summary: Beginners Exercise Three - A Fantasy Bed


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Over the sea and through a cloudless sky, through the brightest day, and star-filled heavens, effortlessly we fly, a vehicle for my desires.

We pass through unimagined beauty, to discover ideas of which no one could dream.

We travel through time to the distant past where I may roam at will and where my every wish is fulfilled.

We go on a voyage to a far off land where I am king, and I am taken to meet my future queen. She joins me and we drift together upon an ocean of tranquillity.

We journey together, my bed and I.






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Anna Reynolds at 22:46 on 15 July 2003  Report this post
Interesting... is the bed itself the queen? I like the idea that it might be, like a wonderful flying carpet of a bed... and there are queen and king beds. I like the way that you convey a sense of all time and space, although I was hungry for just a little more detail- perhaps in 'unimagined beauty, to discover ideas of which no one could dream.' I want more specifics, just a speck or a hint of what's special and magical for you- otherwise this might feel slightly like a condensed version of a much longer tale, almost like a synopsis. Maybe an idea might be to take one line of this wonderful fairy tale and list or randomly write what those ideas or wishes are- 'my wishes are fulfilled.' Give us a little taste maybe of what these might be- they can be as obscure or odd or fey as you like, but I think this would be lovely with a little more detail.

bluesky3d at 23:26 on 15 July 2003  Report this post
Anna

What inspired this in part, were bedtime stories like Peter Pan. Like most parents, I used to read them to my kids when they were small. The bed became a vehicle for them to travel to Neverland.

The idea was that the bed becomes a vehicle to take us to the land of our dreams, both literally and metaphorically, it also having love-making connotations.

It was left deliberately ambiguous so that it could be viewed as though it was from the point of view of the bed itself, and have a sense of its own personality. Yes, the idea of a king bed and a queen bed making love, is a touch bizarre, but none the less engaging for it being so.

Thanks for you comments I will consider your idea of including more detail of the dreams and see whether this works.


Andrew :o)

bluesky3d at 00:01 on 16 July 2003  Report this post
OK here is the rewrite sticking to 100 word format...


Together, we embark upon a journey of discovery, you and I.

Over the sea and through a cloudless sky, through the brightest day, and star-filled heavens, effortlessly we fly.

We pass through unimagined beauty, to discover lands of which no one could dream. Of secret mysteries, knights and ladies in crinoline, wizards, witches, serpents and dragons; a distant past where we may roam at will, where every wish is granted and where every hope fulfilled.

Kings and queens drift together on a voyage of discovery upon an ocean of tranquillity, and become a vehicle for your desires.


bluesky3d at 00:36 on 16 July 2003  Report this post
This is from the point of view of the king size bed, or equally from the point of view of its traveller talking to the bed... take your pick...


Together, we embark upon a journey of discovery, you and I, a vehicle for my desire.

Over the sea and through a cloudless sky, through the brightest day, and star-filled heavens, effortlessly we fly.

We pass through unimagined beauty, to discover lands of which no one could dream. Of secret mysteries, knights and ladies in crinoline, wizards, witches, serpents and dragons; a distant past where we may roam at will, where every wish is granted and where every hope fulfilled.

You and I drift together on a voyage upon a tranquil ocean, where I meet my queen and together we lie.



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