Hi all,

Hot on the heels of Chapter 1 comes Chapter 2. Thanks for all the comments of the first part, hopefully this second section is half-decent too.

All feedback greatly appreciated.

Bav

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I guess this would help:

http://www.writewords.org.uk/archive/8248.asp

Also, please let me know if the title sucks as bad as I have a feeling it does.

Bav,

"His Dark Secret" sounds like a play on "His Dark Materials"; if it isn't a wry parody of HDM maybe it isn't gonna work ...

Incidentally, I've read and commented on Chapter 1; will look at Chapter 2 if I can find time

Take care
Andrea

Thanks Anj, I read your comments and it's greatly appreciated.

It really is fantastic how useful this site is. I honestly don't think I could keep up the momentum to get a novel out without the feedback that you can get here.

I agree about the title, that's what other people have said. I think I'll be changing it but titles are bloody hard.

B