Doyaldinho

This is the opening chapter to my as of yet untitled book. My original first chapter has now been moved further along the narrative and has been re-written. I will act on any criticisms once I've finished the damn thing! ;) 

The second chapter of my untitled novel... (feel free to throw some titles at me by the way once you get more into the story!) Introducing t the main character Revan as a boy. 

The next installment of my untitled novel, heeding the advice if GC and NM in reducing the amount of characters I introduce at once! I've hopefully tidied it up a bit too. 

The second part of my third chapter. I've been beavering away with this and done around 18,000 words so far but neglected to upload any for a while. Let me know what you think and by all means nit pick away. 

The first half of my fourth chapter. Nit pick away! 

A revised prologue to my first, as yet untitled, novel. Hopefully heeding the advice of Gaius and NMott! I will upload more chapters as I complete them. :) 

A short story set in the fantasy world I have created for my WIP novel. I decided to write this based on the past of one of its characters. Cora's past is only implicitly mentioned but I felt it interesting enough to be told here. This is also the first time that I have written anything in the 1st person, never mind attempting to write from a woman's perspective! 

The 2nd draft of my short story. Hopefully the lumps have been ironed out of the prose. I would like your opinions on the piece as a whole; do you think it is "good" enough? I've had a hard time getting believable reviews from people I know with most of my stuff!!!